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Wanton Venture ~ Elaine Lowe
Release Date: June 2, 2010 ~ Resplendence Publishing

“Thank you, Rigby. That will be all.” The butler took one last look at him then left, closing the door softly behind him.

Raymond bowed slightly, his eyes studying this mysterious woman.

She stood and inclined her head. “Greetings, Mr. Talbury. My name is Helena Gracechurch. I am happy to make your acquaintance.”

Good, Alan said nothing about the damned title.

“The pleasure is mine, Miss Gracechurch. How may I help you?”

She indicated the seat across the desk and they both sat. She shuffled papers on the desk, and he took the time to really look at her. At first glance, she looked like a governess or an old auntie, with a high necked serviceable gown in a light shade of gray. Her dark red hair was up in a severe style, without any attempt to highlight her features. She wore spectacles as well, highly unfashionable. And he thought, given the lack of squinting lines around her eyes, very possibly unnecessary.

But all that could not hide the sprinkling of freckles across the line of her nose, proving that despite her rosy pale skin, she occasionally let the sun shine down on her face without a proper bonnet. The warm amber of her eyes could not be dulled but glimmered with intelligence. Her dress might be severe, but it could not hide an impressive bosom or her light and pleasing frame.

Most of all, the tight bun she wore had let a single red curl fall against her neck, and his gaze was immediately drawn to it. Regardless of his respect for women or his attempts to think of this as a business meeting, for a long moment, all he could think about was getting that hair loose and getting his hands into it.

“So, Mr. Talbury, Mr. Saksville has told me that you have considerable—if unconventional—experience in the Navy during the war.”

Raymond smiled. Unconventional was a very politic way of putting it, Alan.

“Yes, Miss Gracechurch, I’ve commanded my share of ships during the recent conflicts.”

She paused for a moment and a smile almost touched her lips. There was something in her eyes that he could not quite identify, though for a moment it reminded him of passion. “Yes, well…have you had any experience with cargo vessels rather than military ships?”

He thought of the months he’d acted as a common sailor in the French-controlled Spanish navy, hauling cargo on supply ships, and acting as crew on captured merchant vessels. “Yes, I have worked on cargo vessels, though not in a command capacity.” Unless the cargo was black powder meant to blow up a bridge over the river Coa. On that tiny boat, he’d definitely been in command.

She nodded and made a note on the page she held in front of her. He wondered how many men she had evaluated for this position, or if he was the first. Noting the very slight tremor in her hand, he thought it was highly probably he was the first.

Had she ever been kissed? What man would be lucky enough to caress those pink lips with his own? To taste her tongue, or taste her other lips, to open the virgin fruit of her loins and savor her intoxicating innocence. Raymond shifted uncomfortably and tried to focus on listening to her words rather than his imaginings.

“You also are half-Spanish, correct?”

He repressed the urge to groan. Why were the English so bloody narrow-minded? His mother would be most interested in an account of this conversation when he returned to their Bristol lodgings, the Rose and Sail Inn. She had insisted on accompanying him, having no desire to be left at the gargantuan Belforth House in London, all alone with disreputable servants and the threat of creditors at the door.

“Yes, my mother is Spanish. Doña Maria Katrina Escobar de Santos.” A smile broke out over Miss Gracechurch’s features, setting her eyes alight.

“Excellent!”

Rarely had anyone been pleased about his lineage It had practically caused his grandfather to disown his father, and only sheer laziness to bother with the legal details meant that Raymond himself was now the Earl. “Might I ask why this is such a pleasing prospect, Miss Gracechurch?”

She blushed, a rosy bloom that crept up her neck and stained her cheeks in the most becoming manner. Raymond swallowed, thinking how lovely she would look in the throes of passion, her bright eyes filled with desire and her cheeks stained with the evidence of her passion.

13 Replies to “Excerpt Thursday ~ Hook Me!”

  1. Unfortunately, this excerpt does not work for me. There are grammar issues and a light purpling of the prose.

  2. I hate to say this, but the cover doesn’t make me want to read this. Is this erotic?

  3. I love me some erotic historical romance! I actually think the cover is very hot!

  4. I would have to say I’m 50/50 on this…..it does seem to pull me in, until I see the cover. I don’t know why, but I did not like it.

  5. I don’t know what to think. The excerpt was ok but the cover was kind of distracting. I don’t think I like it so much.

  6. Same here. I’m not fond of the cover and the excerpt really doesn’t do it for me. I probably would not buy this book.

  7. when I clicked to read the description I may have chose to read it if I found it in the library. But that cover does Not work for me. Just the angle of the couple (what Ar they doing?) and the way they try to put too mich on the cover (couple in an odd embrace, boat, & putting the author name in bright yellow in the odd corner placement) would have made me put the book down w/o even reading the cover. The excerpt didn’t really catch my attention enough. Perhaps a different portion of the book, I’m more likely to be drawn in to an excerpt from the female perspective unless the male is one I know & love from a previous book he’s made an appearance in. I don’t know. It Could be a decent read, but neither the cover or the excerpt make me rush to get it.

  8. I Do Not like the cover. It’s trying to hard. They are in odd position for an embrace. Plus it could just be me but he seems oddly thick, like he could almost be round with muscles? I don’t know how else to describe it. There is just too much happening on the cover. Odd embrace, a ship, and then the title & author’s name are supposed to stand out as well. Except the author’s name is oddly bright yellow in the corner of the book rather than having the title as the most important thing. I think they should have had Less on the cover, or at least less that is supposed to be Important.

    yes, the cover did turn me off of the story since they almost tried too hard there, so makes me doubt the contents. The description of the story sounded good, but the excerpt did not hook me. I probably would have done better with her viewpoint as an excerpt. It could be a good book & I may have happily read it w/o having seen the cover if given a copy to review. But I would not be buying it at this point.

  9. I just want to thanks you all for your comments. It’s very good to know what works and what doesn’t in presenting a book. If you are interested, I encourage you to look at another excerpt here: http://www.resplendencepublishing.com/298.html, or here: http://elainelowenovels.com/?p=187. Also, if you like erotic Regency, I have several other books with a difference publisher (Ellora’s Cave), including Scandalous Profession, Foretell the Flame, and Match Made by Moonlight.

    Happy Reading!
    Elaine Lowe
    http://www.elainelowenovels.com

  10. I think the cover should be toned down. As a reader, I like to have something left to the imagination, more of a tease and well, this does not leave any.

    I do approve of the heroine’s name !

    The excerpt enticed me because I love historicals and especially those with a sea faring slant, but I was rather stunned the direction his thoughts took right out of the gate. Particularly for a man who has had to be in command and more disciplined.

    That leads me to believe this must be an erotic?

    Still, I would be curious to check out more.

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